Radio Chthulucene 87.9 FM

Okay, I have now received feedback from the class on my first draft of my final piece. It went pretty well, I thought, especially considering this is my first major piece for an upper division writing class and that I had a busy weekend when I wrote it. So now I just need to work on looking through the feedback I received and revising the piece based on that.

Based on the feedback I got, the idea seemed to interest people. They liked the general idea and thought it would work well for the final project. Which is nice, since this is very different from what I usually do. So, I think I will keep the general format of this piece.

Some of the feedback I got for the piece as written was that I might characterize who is changing the channels and dive more into the religious and political aspects of this piece. For the first one, I honestly did not think about who was doing this too much. I just got an idea and wrote it down with no idea of who was doing it or why. It is something I may consider, since it is a good idea and would allow for a more complex piece as I work to characterize the individual in an indirect way. As for the second, the religious references were there since I am a religious guy, and I had the idea of a religious apocalypse. That’s it. No politics. I don’t really want to delve that much into it since that was not the point. I do think I could improve on worldbuilding at least. Or make some points clearer. The idea was that 144 million people disappeared, not one third (although I may change that number) and that all who disappeared were at peace with themselves. Had a sense of identity, or purpose. Not torn between worlds, as the border crossers I had in the piece were. Obviously, this was unclear, so I need to work on that.

As for feedback on translating it to a sonic medium, there was a lot. Some of the feedback was using different people or voices per station, which is a good idea and was similar to what I had in mind. Another was having empty stations, which I did not consider, although I do like that idea. Then there were also several mentions of cutting off some of the thoughts and phrases, which I had at one point in my piece before I changed it. It does make sense and would be fun to incorporate. Others include having it be a piece one could understand at any point (very interesting) and having different backgrounds in each station (difficult but it would be fun to try).

And that’s just all I looked at. There is more that I need to go through. But this gives me a lot to think about. Thank you, fellow classmates, for all this feedback.